One major thing I noticed is the opening to your right; you use a shuto-uchi, whereas on the opening to the left (ura of the stuff performed) you use a haishu-uchi. In other words, you start out holding your hand horizontal, but on the same point in the other direction, you keep your hand vertical.

Like mentioned in response to the other kata, you kept your fingers loose, not closed.

You slightly turn in your knees with sideward techniques (it's hard to do without I know). For example on the soto-uke.

Nice work though.
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Ives